The Great Ego state

[Antipodi]

The Great Ego State
:toff::toff::toff::toff:
Man this poem sucks
Its so bad I wouldn't feed it to down and out ducks
It has the flow of a crippled four legged lizard
Couldn't even understand it in a whiteout blizzard
Its such crap ..couldn't even read it on my lap

There is no feeling , no Rhyme
Like a unsprung clock its way out of time
And the spelling ..what kindergarten did you not attend
Maybe you could rewrite the English dictionary and words you could bend
That last line, so forced so unsublime

You should have been a butcher or a cook
Cause as a writer your not worth a boiling chook
And did I tell you your family wears bright red boxer shorts
Awe come on now I'm really a good sport
Just tryin to help

You don't get too many poets as good as me
I just want to nurture and encourage
I know sometimes my words get of hand
But hell why should I be so shy, so bland
So come on ..let me critique you ..kick yo big A
:urinal::urinal::urinal::urinal::urinal:

[Yog]

LoL, we've had a couple of people like that around here. The bad thing is they would read that and be proud. "I come from a family of writers so I know what good writing is supposed to be. Read my work and be amazed." This was quite fun. :lolabove:

[sunday]

*shrugs* every one thinks they know what good art is, but it's subjective.

[k2hsharpe]

""I come from a family of writers so I know what good writing is supposed to be."

I think I remember this
(laughing))))

[Isis-ra]

Great poem :angel: *sarcasm*.

But then again my poems are probably like that.